Absolutely love love love this game. It's well written and complex, it doesn't glorify the mafia, which adds dimension to it. However I do love completing bad endings... idk doing the bad endings first just make the good ending sooooooooo much better.
So if you could confirm if there's only one bad ending per route, that would bring peace to my life.
Thanks so much, Bunny! I'm glad you're liking it <3
As for your question -- yes, there is only one bad end per route for most of the love interests. Two routes have slight differences in the bad endings, but they will be the last released as they are more involved/attached to the story's main plot. For Alessio and Luca, though, rest assured there was only one bad end!
thank you so much for bring peace and joy to my life. Stay healthy and don't forget to look after yourself, you're an amazing writer and I wish nothing but for the joy your writing has brought to me to comeback to you tenfold.
I rarely leave a comment on projects but holy shit this was incredible. I genuinely enjoyed every single second of playing this vn, at first I come with no expectation since I have been eyeing this vn for quite some time but have been putting it off but honestly I wish I played it sooner!
I adore that the sprites in game changes many times as if they’re actually reacting to other character’s actions and words. I actually have to rewind and slow down whenever I notice something changes just so I could see how the character reacts. I know it’s tedious work to change the sprites multiple times so kudos to you for going the extra mile.
I can feel the effort and care you’ve put in this. The MC actually have some sort of character development is honestly a breath of fresh air, I understand every action she did and every emotion she feels. Yes she is flawed but I think that’s what makes this unique and better, I like the fact that she IS human and if I’m in her spot I would actually lose it. Every character is enjoyable and the fact they have their own personality is top notch, not every vn could do that especially with that many LI.
I love Luca, he’s so sweet and gentle with the MC, he’s my favorite <3 I especially love the jealousy moments he (I definitely didn’t choose certain choices so I could see how he reacts). I was surprise that Luca was one of the LI routes that you finished first since usually he’s the type of LI that people did halfheartedly or finished last. This type of LI had been my favorite since the beginning so how pleasantly surprised I was when I see your dev log. There needs to be justice for this type of LI, I think more love should be given and you did just that.
Your writing really did wonders for the certain key moments especially during the first act, I just played it and it almost made me bawl my eyes out. The pacing was good and while I usually prefer the romance to be longer (slow burn type), I think the length fits this vn, so props to you!
I wish there’s a bonus LI pov for funsies so we could see how they feel in certain certain moments. But honestly thank you for making this
Thank you so much, Yazp!! Your comment totally brightened my day <3
I'm so glad you enjoyed the story pacing and length, and that Luca met your expectations! Honestly, I also wish I could have made each route longer, but it's hard to write for so many people in under a year (end my suffering LOL!) Anyway, again -- thank you so much for playing and leaving such a kind comment!
(P.S. I've been considering a sequel DLC or even just a small "extra moments" addition once the game is done if people want that, so maybe more bonus LI pov in the future!)
Just finished the demo and I think it's the first time I enjoyed interacting with literally every LI from a big cast, they're all very interesting and I can't wait to know more of their secrets and unique personality traits 👀 I have a favorite though. Luca my beloved. His introduction with the flowers and the specific power dynamic between him and the MC (and the teasing due to it) were soooo good. Polite sweet bois who can cook >>>>
I loved basically every aspect of the demo but I was wondering, without getting into specific spoilers, will the MC have a proactive role within the mafia and the hierarchical system? I personally only enjoy this setting when the MC is somewhat ambitious as otherwise she tends to fall into the caretaker role and that's just not my cup of tea. Will be waiting for future updates :) 💗
Wow, thank you so much!! I'm so glad all of them were interesting to you! (also I'm SO glad you like Luca! When I first made him, I was worried people would think he's too vanilla or feel-good) <3
(answered the bulk of your question under the "view more" cut for others' sake even though it doesn't go into too much detail!)
As for your question, MC herself does not fall into a caretaker role outside of regular, run-of-the-mill kindness. She, more often than not, is the one being looked after rather than looking after others. Our MC here is a bit too nosy for her own good, so the others are more careful about what they do and tend to keep her under lock and key. She doesn't like that much. ^^;
There are two alternative endings for two characters where the MC embraces the lifestyle and joins it, one route where she learns a bit of self defense, and one route where she learns as much as she can -- and if she's not fully prepared she will get a bad end regardless of any affection points earned with that character.
Hopefully that helps! If it doesn't sound like your cup of tea, no worries at all! Once again, thank you so much for playing! ^^
I personally love nosy MCs and those endings you mentioned where Danielle learns about self defense or actively joins the mafia lifestyle seem exactly like my cup of tea, so I'll def be enjoying the game in the future when it's out :) 💞
I really enjoyed this demo and can't wait for the full release! The art style is nice and clean. The guys all seem to be unique and I like the MC as well. Do you have a patreon? Would love to support the dev.
Thank you so much!! I'm so glad you enjoyed the demo - did you have a favorite character? 🤭
And yes, I'm in the process of making one! I believe you may have found it early though haha
If that was you, I sent you a DM on Patreon! Otherwise, all the livefeed game updates will be on Twitter @Snakkberry and I will also be launching the Patreon there
Once again, thank you so much for your interest - it means a lot to know people care about a little passion project I've run headfirst into by myself haha ^^
This is such a fun demo -- I am loving the writing, story overall, and the art. All the characters have me intrigued and looking forward to the full version! I lean towards being the most interested in Antonio and Leonardo / their routes, but it will be interesting to see the routes for everyone.
I enjoyed this a lot! Mafia plots are always really intriguing and the fact that we have a mystery to solve regarding who killed MC's parents makes it all the more engaging!
The MC is fantastic and I liked all of the guys too (also, can I just say, I love how Italian their names are)! They all have distinct personalities, which makes their dynamics very fun and interesting. My favorites, so far, were Renzo & Luca but I also like Antonio quite a bit (even though I agree with MC that he's a bit of an ass xDD).
I'm excited to play the rest when it comes out! Will be looking forward to your updates. Awesome job, Snakkz! <3
Very intriguing demo! I am excited to see what sort of mafia exploits are in store for MC. You can already see most of the character's personalities shine through in just this snippet of the game, so kudos to Snakkiez!
Finally had the chance to play through this and it was fun! I definitely like the mafia concept and I'm eager to see where the game will go once our MC is no longer in confinement hehe
My favourite so far is Renzo by a long shot, I just love cheeky brats.
Ah, Nef!! Thank you so much for playing, I'm glad you had fun! <3
Also, welcome to the Renzo lover gang! Cheeky brats are also a favorite of mine (no surprise lol), so I'm excited to write more of his antics across all the routes in the full game ^^
As a Baccano fan, I loved the mafia theme! I think group dynamics with the cast really enhances a story and gives it life, and I enjoyed it a lot in this game. Luca is my favorite so far <3
Aww, thank you so much!! <3 I'm super glad you enjoyed the demo! I put a lot of emphasis on the character dynamics throughout the story, so knowing it's well-received is a relief! (Also, welcome to the Luca lovers club!~)
This game is so well written! The character dynamics are wonderful and not only is interacting with the boys fun, but watching them interact is amazing! A few moments had me laughing out loud! The dev really captured what its like to be stuck with a room full of guys who are practically like brothers. I can't wait for the full release and seeing more from this dev!
P.S. I'm a full Antonio lover, he had me giggling and kicking my feet for real <3
Aww, thank you so much!!!! I'm so glad that you enjoyed the relationship between all the boys, because that was something I want to focus a lot on in the game to give them a bit of humanity rather than all doom and gloom! <3
I have so many things to say and I have so many feelings after finishing the demo! I don't know where to begin.
First of all: I knew your writing is absolutely amazing, but you really outdid yourself with this demo! The writing is superb and you are able to feel the emotions from the very beginning! 💛
The character sprites with their various emotions, the soundtracks, effects and different BGs is making the demo even better and are implemented really really well to strengthen the emotions conveyed through the writing!
It's also amazing you created all of this with the limited time and by yourself / as a solo dev while still working as a writer on another game jam entry!
(Spoilers) As for the story itself: This was a great prelude to the full story, we got a great introduction to Danielle and her struggles and trauma from losing her parents without being able to reconcile and how her "normal" life suddenly flips upside down - everything she might have known was actually shrouded in mystery!
I really like the distinctive character designs and how each character is different / recognisable from one another; through their appearance and personality! I think Antonio, Renzo and Angelo are my favourite! (in that order) I just really love Antonio's maturity and seemingly cold-hearted matter-of-factness, Renzo being the polar opposite, being humorous and caring (by giving her the present to cheer her up) while Angelo is much more of a brute trying to prove himself different from his family and to restore his honor!
Angelo's and Ren's "fighting" scene was hilarious! 😭
I think their routes might be really really interesting with the story beats you've set up in the demo!
(You can guess who I chose at the end 😌)
(I can understand why everyone likes Luca tho - his nice and caring attitude towards Danielle is really intriguing, though I can't trust it just yet!)
Thank you so much for creating DOAS and showing this to us! I can't wait to see future updates of the project and play the full game one day!
Thank you so much for the nice review!! <3 It was definitely a learning curve for me when I started, but I learned a lot and I'm happy for the experience and to keep improving as a solo dev!
I'm glad Danielle has been such a decent protagonist for people so far, as I really tried to make her have slightly more realistic (making decisions you know you'll regret based on emotions, etc). And your taste in men is impeccable, as I am a fellow Ren appreciator~
(Also Fun fact: originally Angelo and Ren's fighting scene's joke was based off of Avatar: The Last Airbender! The line was originally "Aw, come on Zuko! Come get your honor, you angsty thing!" but it was flagged as something others potentially might not understand so I rewrote it slightly lol)
Where do I even start with this?! The story is SO engaging, and the characters are so interesting and fun! It was simply a blast to play - I kept zooming through the entire game because I was having so much fun with the characters and the story!
I'll start by talking about the setting? Mafia?!?! That's SUCH a fun concept for an otome! It was really interesting listening about how the family was organized (and how Danielle related to it - I had no idea that was even a thing!) We just got whiffs of the plot in the demo, but I can SMELL the drama coming! I'm really looking forward to seeing how it develops!
I have to say, my favorite part of the game is definitely Danielle (the MC)! The starting scene of the game is so incredible at characterizing her - you really get to know her sense of responsibility, her caring nature, and her close relationship with her grandfather. As the scene progresses and you hear about her past tragedies,, you become deeply invested in her last remaining familial relationship. I love that she is likeable, but flawed, like any good character. She's kind, but she's also willing to stand up for things that she believes in. At the same time, she has a temper and can be impulsive/immature. The demo did a wonderful job at establishing her both as a character that you want to see and root for as well as a character that you want to see grow as the story progresses.
I ADORE how ALL of the relationships are well-fleshed out, not just the relationships between Danielle and her LIs. Danielle's relationship with her grandfather is SO sweet and wholesome, and you really feel her betrayal after learning that her grandfather has been lying to her for years. My favorite had to be Danielle's relationship with Morgan - while Morgan will be a LI later (and I RELISHED finding the option where you can flirt with her), I also just appreciated that Danielle and Morgan are very good friends! Through their interactions, you can really tell how close and supportive they are of one another. Furthermore, each of the LIs also has a dynamic with each other that is apparent as you play. For instance, Luca is demeaned by most of the other guys (but mostly Alessio). Ren has a playful nature and loves teasing the other guys. Leo is very aloof and professional with his colleagues. And Antonio is just trying to wrangle his five very large children.
I won't include an essay about each of the LIs, but I'll just say that I LOVE how they were written (even Alessio...) They are each so different in their personalities and how they treat Danielle. REN is definitely my favorite. I thought he would be much more of a scamp, but he's actually SO sweet and adorable towards Danielle (bringing her paper, cooking for her, etc.) My second favorite was Luca! It was so cute when Danielle called him by his real name and not Junior, and he got along with Danielle so well. Even though you only get a few scenes with each LI, you really get a good sense of what their personalities are like AND what their flaws/weaknesses are - what they will grow to improve throughout the game. I am so intrigued by all of them (even Alessio...)
The writing is so good?! I LOVE the dialogue. Each character has so much personality and dynamicism that comes through in the way they speak! I also really liked the pacing, as it never felt too slow or fast.
I also really appreciated how you got a snapshot of each of the LIs as they encounter Danielle and Morgan on their outing before the "start" of the story proper. It really makes them feel more fleshed out and real, seeing them going about their daily lives, and the stark contrast between their normal everyday selves and their "mafia bodyguard" selves was very fun to see!
I love the look of the start menu; the black silhouettes with the logo displayed against the dark red and black background is so ominous and yet mysterious at the same time. It really sets the tone of a game involving dangerous men!
The MUSIC was just INCREDIBLE. With every single track, I was just thinking, "WOW, this sounds awesome?!" Not only are the songs very pleasant to listen to on their own, but they also set the tone of the game so well. My favorite was the nighttime theme!
DANG there were so many backgrounds?! And Danielle and Morgan's sprites are drop-dead GORGEOUS. (Also Ren has a very cute face. I'm definitely not biased...)
Overall, fantastic work!! This was so fun to play, and I loved meeting the characters (finally) and watching them all bounce off each other! I CAN'T WAIT for the updates!
OMG CHATTER!! Thank you so much for taking the time to leave such an extensive review TAT <3
While there were so many things I wanted to fix but didn't have time, I'm glad that the story was intriguing and that all the boys' personalities came across well! I also appreciate the love to the amount of backgrounds and music, because I lamented over those the most, wondering if the music feel was right or if the pacing was good...and not to mention all the backgrounds I'm going to have to remake eventually on top of sprite revamps LOL
I'm also super happy you loved Morgan & Danielle's relationship, as well as the little flirt option! She's one of my top 3 favorite LIs, so I'm super hype to write more about her!
Overall, thank you SO MUCH for giving DOAS a chance and leaving it so much love <3
I wrote a waaaay longer review to this but when I pasted it here it looked intimidating x°° so I made it short ahaha! So, I don't like mafia aesthetics in games (being Italian and all) but your game was suggested to me so much that I had to try, and I'm glad I did, it's a very fun demo. I'll be definetly back for the full version! Luca is my favorite, my precious. I hope to see more about him in the final version. And Morgan, too, she's adorable! The game had lots of work put into it and it shows.
I know it's a weird suggestion because the game is mafia themed, but if I can propose... I would lessen the 'mafia' aesthetic. I'm suggesting this because I liked the game and I want to see it shine even more: the mafia IRL here is very different from what is shown in the game and it doesn't look realistic ;__;" BUT having the characters being simply the heirs of a businessman family with a shady (mafia) past would make way more sense with the clothing, the elegance, etc (cause Italian mafiosi don't dress like that) and even having branching families protecting it (with the Soldati being bodyguards instead of soldiers). If you need an Italian beta reader \ sensitivity reader and you're open to that I'd gladly help uwu/
Wow, thank you so much for taking the time for a review! I'm glad you liked it and loved both Morgan and Luca as much as I do! <3
Your critique about the Mafia aesthetics is valid, being from Italy, but the Mafia aesthetic was actually based on the Italian-American Mafia from around the 1920s but in a modern setting! <3 I chose to veer away from making it entirely realistic to not make it too dark and to give it some leeway in terms of story (similar to how Ozmafia had Mafia features but had definitely taken liberties in terms of realism!) ^^
Though, I definitely wouldn't reject any help beta reading when I have more of the script ready, so when the time comes I'd be happy to reach out and see if you're still interested! <3
(P.S. Luca will have his own route for sure, and I'm super excited to write more of the snuggly little guy~ ^^)
Thank you so much for saying so! I'm super happy you enjoyed the demo <3
I'm definitely always keeping an eye out for proofreaders to help the route writing process! I'll be taking a short break (about 1-2 weeks) to recover from the jam crunch time before I resume working on it, so when I get around that point in the script I'll make sure to reach out and see if you're still interested/have the time!
Dammit, Chim beat me to reviewing it! (lmaooo it's no problem love you!) Plus I played it first hahaha
I loved this story from the second I heard of it, to reading it, to now playing it! Danielle has great character, and yet feels good as a sit in for the player. Morgan is incredibly endearing, and I love my boys- Luca especially, he deserves the world!
The music is well placed, the UI is very sexy red, and the writing is top tier!
I buy into the emotion presented, and love how diverse your cast is! Even if I wasn't entirely wanting to make love to every guy, I definitely wanted to get to know them!
Antonio is sexy in a frustrating way, cause I want to punch him, but he and Danielle have so much tension!
Alessio is a pain in my ass, but it's mainly because I am #1 Luca lover.
Angelo is my babe, and I want to know him, I want to peel back all his layers I know you have for him.
Leo is my second fav for a reason, he's such a loveable dork and so sexy too- the perfect combo.
Ren really won me over making it to my 3rd spot for the guys, I love that scene with him and the Danielle in regards to the journal! Goes to show how one scene can make you feel meh towards someone to totally getting them and loving them!
Luca is best boy, no notes, how can you improve perfection?
The relationship Danielle has with her grandfather is top notched, and so nuanced and real! But no less loving.
The humor is well placed, and there is so much heart in this project. I am it's biggest fan and will follow it no matter where it may go <3 Being even a small part of this project makes me so incredibly happy!
Thank you so much for all your help with the beta testing and proofreading, Joy!! I'm glad that the demo met your expectations and you were able to meet and enjoy the characters in new ways compared to the script!
Hey!!! I played the demo!!! It was so good already, gosh!
I have to say the beginning of it got me HOOKED! The emotions, the music, the writing, everything was just excellent and Danielle ended up being a very touching protagonist. But more than that, her interactions with the boys showed her doubts, her fears, her hopes, her personality and shaped her as a character. Honestly, the moment she suggests a truce with Antonio made me scream: more than Antonio, it's really Danielle who I've fallen in love with during this scene efgrfgtrf really, she's in my top 5 girl protagonists so far! You managed to make her relatable and, I insist, touching. Also, Morgan is a supportive friend and an angel, I really enjoyed her!!! Excited to see more of her in the full-game.
For the love interests, I have to agree with Joy: LUCA????? LUCA????? LUCA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I loved his friendship with Alessio (when he said "That's my boy!" I WHEEZED). He's nice, caring, gentle, friendly, seems to be small in such a big world, and I really LOVE this kind of characters!!!!! So many green flags!! I love him!!!!! I remember he was my number 1 in terms of personality (my overall number 1 was Leo though if I had to consider personality and looks), and I'm glad I was right: I LOVE HIM!!!!! And the cooking CG was adorable!!!!!! And when Danielle told him: "Then I won't be your charge, I'll be your friend" EFRGTR4ET AAAAAAH!!!!!! They are definitely my OTP from this game!!!!!
Also, I have to say I'm pleasantly surprised by Renzo!!! He was very supportive and I enjoyed that a lot!! I was expecting him to be a bit more like Alessio, but he was better than that actually!! Excited to explore his relationships with his brother and with Angelo. And the "duvet monster" thing was so cute efgbtrfghbg
Regarding my dear Leo, I loved him!!!! I'll admit I don't ship him as much with Danielle as I do for Luca, but the way he just comments things while being detached is so amusing (honestly, he was the funniest for me, the "he cheats at cards too" made me scream)? And he's still reassuring and present for Danielle, in his own way, of course, but aaaaaaah!!!! I do feel like he's the kindest of them all deep down (although Luca is a close second).
For Alessio, I enjoyed his interactions with Luca. He was a bit of a flirt, which is not my type, but you know, I want to discover him! To see what he's hiding deep down!
For Antonio, honestly, you got me at the book scene during the first part of the game lovers talking about books is one of favourite tropes fegdeze His relationship with Danielle was a rollercoaster, but Danielle is so amazing she's able to fix him!!!! I know she can!
I've seen too little of Angelo to have an opinion, but the conflict between his family's deeds and himself is interesting!! He seems like the ugly duckling of the group, and I'm curious to explore more!
Overall, the GUI was neat, the art was really good and the music carefully chosen (I especially enjoy the ones towards the end and at the beginning!). The writing was great and the pacing absolutely wonderful (I can tell you have experience in writing!). I'm really looking forward to discovering more, and you can be proud of you! This is an amazing first VN (is this your first VN?), and you did a splendid job!!!!
OMG Chim!! Thank you so much for leaving your thoughts! I'm beyond touched at all the nice things you said, but ESPECIALLY mentioning how much you liked Danielle and the music!
I wanted Danielle to be her own person in a sense, and not push her into a helpless self insert box while still letting her have her own problems she deals with in her own way, so I'm glad that panned out well! I also was SUPER nervous about the music and lamented over the choices and timing for a long time, so I'm glad you liked it!
As for the boys...I'm so glad you liked them! (Also super interesting to see how everyone is slowly converting to the Luca side!) I'm excited to see if your opinion changes as the routes get released!
(And yes this is my first VN!! Once again thank you so much for taking the time to leave this comment, I appreciate you!!)
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Absolutely love love love this game. It's well written and complex, it doesn't glorify the mafia, which adds dimension to it. However I do love completing bad endings... idk doing the bad endings first just make the good ending sooooooooo much better.
So if you could confirm if there's only one bad ending per route, that would bring peace to my life.
Thanks so much, Bunny! I'm glad you're liking it <3
As for your question -- yes, there is only one bad end per route for most of the love interests. Two routes have slight differences in the bad endings, but they will be the last released as they are more involved/attached to the story's main plot. For Alessio and Luca, though, rest assured there was only one bad end!
thank you so much for bring peace and joy to my life. Stay healthy and don't forget to look after yourself, you're an amazing writer and I wish nothing but for the joy your writing has brought to me to comeback to you tenfold.
I rarely leave a comment on projects but holy shit this was incredible. I genuinely enjoyed every single second of playing this vn, at first I come with no expectation since I have been eyeing this vn for quite some time but have been putting it off but honestly I wish I played it sooner!
I adore that the sprites in game changes many times as if they’re actually reacting to other character’s actions and words. I actually have to rewind and slow down whenever I notice something changes just so I could see how the character reacts. I know it’s tedious work to change the sprites multiple times so kudos to you for going the extra mile.
I can feel the effort and care you’ve put in this. The MC actually have some sort of character development is honestly a breath of fresh air, I understand every action she did and every emotion she feels. Yes she is flawed but I think that’s what makes this unique and better, I like the fact that she IS human and if I’m in her spot I would actually lose it. Every character is enjoyable and the fact they have their own personality is top notch, not every vn could do that especially with that many LI.
I love Luca, he’s so sweet and gentle with the MC, he’s my favorite <3 I especially love the jealousy moments he (I definitely didn’t choose certain choices so I could see how he reacts). I was surprise that Luca was one of the LI routes that you finished first since usually he’s the type of LI that people did halfheartedly or finished last. This type of LI had been my favorite since the beginning so how pleasantly surprised I was when I see your dev log. There needs to be justice for this type of LI, I think more love should be given and you did just that.
Your writing really did wonders for the certain key moments especially during the first act, I just played it and it almost made me bawl my eyes out. The pacing was good and while I usually prefer the romance to be longer (slow burn type), I think the length fits this vn, so props to you!
I wish there’s a bonus LI pov for funsies so we could see how they feel in certain certain moments. But honestly thank you for making this
Thank you so much, Yazp!! Your comment totally brightened my day <3
I'm so glad you enjoyed the story pacing and length, and that Luca met your expectations! Honestly, I also wish I could have made each route longer, but it's hard to write for so many people in under a year (end my suffering LOL!) Anyway, again -- thank you so much for playing and leaving such a kind comment!
(P.S. I've been considering a sequel DLC or even just a small "extra moments" addition once the game is done if people want that, so maybe more bonus LI pov in the future!)
This demo is amazing!!! The cast is GREAT and I love the artwork and the writing and everything!!! everyone play this game!!
Just finished the demo and I think it's the first time I enjoyed interacting with literally every LI from a big cast, they're all very interesting and I can't wait to know more of their secrets and unique personality traits 👀 I have a favorite though. Luca my beloved. His introduction with the flowers and the specific power dynamic between him and the MC (and the teasing due to it) were soooo good. Polite sweet bois who can cook >>>>
I loved basically every aspect of the demo but I was wondering, without getting into specific spoilers, will the MC have a proactive role within the mafia and the hierarchical system? I personally only enjoy this setting when the MC is somewhat ambitious as otherwise she tends to fall into the caretaker role and that's just not my cup of tea. Will be waiting for future updates :) 💗
Wow, thank you so much!! I'm so glad all of them were interesting to you! (also I'm SO glad you like Luca! When I first made him, I was worried people would think he's too vanilla or feel-good) <3
(answered the bulk of your question under the "view more" cut for others' sake even though it doesn't go into too much detail!)
As for your question, MC herself does not fall into a caretaker role outside of regular, run-of-the-mill kindness. She, more often than not, is the one being looked after rather than looking after others. Our MC here is a bit too nosy for her own good, so the others are more careful about what they do and tend to keep her under lock and key. She doesn't like that much. ^^;
There are two alternative endings for two characters where the MC embraces the lifestyle and joins it, one route where she learns a bit of self defense, and one route where she learns as much as she can -- and if she's not fully prepared she will get a bad end regardless of any affection points earned with that character.
Hopefully that helps! If it doesn't sound like your cup of tea, no worries at all! Once again, thank you so much for playing! ^^
Thanks a lot for the reply!
I personally love nosy MCs and those endings you mentioned where Danielle learns about self defense or actively joins the mafia lifestyle seem exactly like my cup of tea, so I'll def be enjoying the game in the future when it's out :) 💞
I really enjoyed this demo and can't wait for the full release! The art style is nice and clean. The guys all seem to be unique and I like the MC as well. Do you have a patreon? Would love to support the dev.
Thank you so much!! I'm so glad you enjoyed the demo - did you have a favorite character? 🤭
And yes, I'm in the process of making one! I believe you may have found it early though haha
If that was you, I sent you a DM on Patreon! Otherwise, all the livefeed game updates will be on Twitter @Snakkberry and I will also be launching the Patreon there
Once again, thank you so much for your interest - it means a lot to know people care about a little passion project I've run headfirst into by myself haha ^^
This is such a fun demo -- I am loving the writing, story overall, and the art. All the characters have me intrigued and looking forward to the full version! I lean towards being the most interested in Antonio and Leonardo / their routes, but it will be interesting to see the routes for everyone.
I'm so glad to hear you enjoyed it! Your playthrough on Youtube was lovely, and your reactions were so fun!!
Thank you for taking the time to play <3
Thank you -- the story is really just so intriguing and fun so I had a great time playing through the demo. Thank you again for the game/story/art! <3
Gorgeous art. Spoilt for choice with many love interests. Awesome MC and best friend. Love the story premise and writing. Well done!
Thank you so much, Lila!!
I enjoyed this a lot! Mafia plots are always really intriguing and the fact that we have a mystery to solve regarding who killed MC's parents makes it all the more engaging!
The MC is fantastic and I liked all of the guys too (also, can I just say, I love how Italian their names are)! They all have distinct personalities, which makes their dynamics very fun and interesting. My favorites, so far, were Renzo & Luca but I also like Antonio quite a bit (even though I agree with MC that he's a bit of an ass xDD).
I'm excited to play the rest when it comes out! Will be looking forward to your updates. Awesome job, Snakkz! <3
Omg Pri!! I'm so sorry I didn't see this sooner!
Thank you so much for the kind words, it means a lot coming from you! I hope you will also enjoy the full version when it comes out! <3
Very intriguing demo! I am excited to see what sort of mafia exploits are in store for MC. You can already see most of the character's personalities shine through in just this snippet of the game, so kudos to Snakkiez!
p.s. renzo best boy
SYLLA!! I'm sorry I didn't see this!! Thank you so much T-T <3
p.s. I agree >:)
Finally had the chance to play through this and it was fun! I definitely like the mafia concept and I'm eager to see where the game will go once our MC is no longer in confinement hehe
My favourite so far is Renzo by a long shot, I just love cheeky brats.
Ah, Nef!! Thank you so much for playing, I'm glad you had fun! <3
Also, welcome to the Renzo lover gang! Cheeky brats are also a favorite of mine (no surprise lol), so I'm excited to write more of his antics across all the routes in the full game ^^
As a Baccano fan, I loved the mafia theme! I think group dynamics with the cast really enhances a story and gives it life, and I enjoyed it a lot in this game. Luca is my favorite so far <3
Aww, thank you so much!! <3 I'm super glad you enjoyed the demo! I put a lot of emphasis on the character dynamics throughout the story, so knowing it's well-received is a relief! (Also, welcome to the Luca lovers club!~)
I love love all these men and how they are all Italian ❤️ lovely game
No android please?
This game is so well written! The character dynamics are wonderful and not only is interacting with the boys fun, but watching them interact is amazing! A few moments had me laughing out loud! The dev really captured what its like to be stuck with a room full of guys who are practically like brothers. I can't wait for the full release and seeing more from this dev!
P.S. I'm a full Antonio lover, he had me giggling and kicking my feet for real <3
Aww, thank you so much!!!! I'm so glad that you enjoyed the relationship between all the boys, because that was something I want to focus a lot on in the game to give them a bit of humanity rather than all doom and gloom! <3
Six LIs?! Damn you are generous I'm here patiently wait for full game I bet it's gonna be amazing!
Thank you so much for saying so! If we include Morgan, that makes 7 LIs...not to mention a secret route in the full game ;)
Hope you enjoyed the demo! <3
I have so many things to say and I have so many feelings after finishing the demo! I don't know where to begin.
First of all: I knew your writing is absolutely amazing, but you really outdid yourself with this demo! The writing is superb and you are able to feel the emotions from the very beginning! 💛
The character sprites with their various emotions, the soundtracks, effects and different BGs is making the demo even better and are implemented really really well to strengthen the emotions conveyed through the writing!
It's also amazing you created all of this with the limited time and by yourself / as a solo dev while still working as a writer on another game jam entry!
(Spoilers)
As for the story itself: This was a great prelude to the full story, we got a great introduction to Danielle and her struggles and trauma from losing her parents without being able to reconcile and how her "normal" life suddenly flips upside down - everything she might have known was actually shrouded in mystery!
I really like the distinctive character designs and how each character is different / recognisable from one another; through their appearance and personality!
I think Antonio, Renzo and Angelo are my favourite! (in that order) I just really love Antonio's maturity and seemingly cold-hearted matter-of-factness, Renzo being the polar opposite, being humorous and caring (by giving her the present to cheer her up) while Angelo is much more of a brute trying to prove himself different from his family and to restore his honor!
Angelo's and Ren's "fighting" scene was hilarious! 😭
I think their routes might be really really interesting with the story beats you've set up in the demo!
(You can guess who I chose at the end 😌)
(I can understand why everyone likes Luca tho - his nice and caring attitude towards Danielle is really intriguing, though I can't trust it just yet!)
Thank you so much for creating DOAS and showing this to us! I can't wait to see future updates of the project and play the full game one day!
Thank you so much for the nice review!! <3 It was definitely a learning curve for me when I started, but I learned a lot and I'm happy for the experience and to keep improving as a solo dev!
I'm glad Danielle has been such a decent protagonist for people so far, as I really tried to make her have slightly more realistic (making decisions you know you'll regret based on emotions, etc). And your taste in men is impeccable, as I am a fellow Ren appreciator~
(Also Fun fact: originally Angelo and Ren's fighting scene's joke was based off of Avatar: The Last Airbender! The line was originally "Aw, come on Zuko! Come get your honor, you angsty thing!" but it was flagged as something others potentially might not understand so I rewrote it slightly lol)
Where do I even start with this?! The story is SO engaging, and the characters are so interesting and fun! It was simply a blast to play - I kept zooming through the entire game because I was having so much fun with the characters and the story!
I'll start by talking about the setting? Mafia?!?! That's SUCH a fun concept for an otome! It was really interesting listening about how the family was organized (and how Danielle related to it - I had no idea that was even a thing!) We just got whiffs of the plot in the demo, but I can SMELL the drama coming! I'm really looking forward to seeing how it develops!
I have to say, my favorite part of the game is definitely Danielle (the MC)! The starting scene of the game is so incredible at characterizing her - you really get to know her sense of responsibility, her caring nature, and her close relationship with her grandfather. As the scene progresses and you hear about her past tragedies,, you become deeply invested in her last remaining familial relationship. I love that she is likeable, but flawed, like any good character. She's kind, but she's also willing to stand up for things that she believes in. At the same time, she has a temper and can be impulsive/immature. The demo did a wonderful job at establishing her both as a character that you want to see and root for as well as a character that you want to see grow as the story progresses.
I ADORE how ALL of the relationships are well-fleshed out, not just the relationships between Danielle and her LIs. Danielle's relationship with her grandfather is SO sweet and wholesome, and you really feel her betrayal after learning that her grandfather has been lying to her for years. My favorite had to be Danielle's relationship with Morgan - while Morgan will be a LI later (and I RELISHED finding the option where you can flirt with her), I also just appreciated that Danielle and Morgan are very good friends! Through their interactions, you can really tell how close and supportive they are of one another. Furthermore, each of the LIs also has a dynamic with each other that is apparent as you play. For instance, Luca is demeaned by most of the other guys (but mostly Alessio). Ren has a playful nature and loves teasing the other guys. Leo is very aloof and professional with his colleagues. And Antonio is just trying to wrangle his five very large children.
I won't include an essay about each of the LIs, but I'll just say that I LOVE how they were written (even Alessio...) They are each so different in their personalities and how they treat Danielle. REN is definitely my favorite. I thought he would be much more of a scamp, but he's actually SO sweet and adorable towards Danielle (bringing her paper, cooking for her, etc.) My second favorite was Luca! It was so cute when Danielle called him by his real name and not Junior, and he got along with Danielle so well. Even though you only get a few scenes with each LI, you really get a good sense of what their personalities are like AND what their flaws/weaknesses are - what they will grow to improve throughout the game. I am so intrigued by all of them (even Alessio...)
The writing is so good?! I LOVE the dialogue. Each character has so much personality and dynamicism that comes through in the way they speak! I also really liked the pacing, as it never felt too slow or fast.
I also really appreciated how you got a snapshot of each of the LIs as they encounter Danielle and Morgan on their outing before the "start" of the story proper. It really makes them feel more fleshed out and real, seeing them going about their daily lives, and the stark contrast between their normal everyday selves and their "mafia bodyguard" selves was very fun to see!
I love the look of the start menu; the black silhouettes with the logo displayed against the dark red and black background is so ominous and yet mysterious at the same time. It really sets the tone of a game involving dangerous men!
The MUSIC was just INCREDIBLE. With every single track, I was just thinking, "WOW, this sounds awesome?!" Not only are the songs very pleasant to listen to on their own, but they also set the tone of the game so well. My favorite was the nighttime theme!
DANG there were so many backgrounds?! And Danielle and Morgan's sprites are drop-dead GORGEOUS. (Also Ren has a very cute face. I'm definitely not biased...)
Overall, fantastic work!! This was so fun to play, and I loved meeting the characters (finally) and watching them all bounce off each other! I CAN'T WAIT for the updates!
OMG CHATTER!! Thank you so much for taking the time to leave such an extensive review TAT <3
While there were so many things I wanted to fix but didn't have time, I'm glad that the story was intriguing and that all the boys' personalities came across well! I also appreciate the love to the amount of backgrounds and music, because I lamented over those the most, wondering if the music feel was right or if the pacing was good...and not to mention all the backgrounds I'm going to have to remake eventually on top of sprite revamps LOL
I'm also super happy you loved Morgan & Danielle's relationship, as well as the little flirt option! She's one of my top 3 favorite LIs, so I'm super hype to write more about her!
Overall, thank you SO MUCH for giving DOAS a chance and leaving it so much love <3
I wrote a waaaay longer review to this but when I pasted it here it looked intimidating x°° so I made it short ahaha!
So, I don't like mafia aesthetics in games (being Italian and all) but your game was suggested to me so much that I had to try, and I'm glad I did, it's a very fun demo. I'll be definetly back for the full version! Luca is my favorite, my precious. I hope to see more about him in the final version. And Morgan, too, she's adorable! The game had lots of work put into it and it shows.
I know it's a weird suggestion because the game is mafia themed, but if I can propose... I would lessen the 'mafia' aesthetic. I'm suggesting this because I liked the game and I want to see it shine even more: the mafia IRL here is very different from what is shown in the game and it doesn't look realistic ;__;" BUT having the characters being simply the heirs of a businessman family with a shady (mafia) past would make way more sense with the clothing, the elegance, etc (cause Italian mafiosi don't dress like that) and even having branching families protecting it (with the Soldati being bodyguards instead of soldiers). If you need an Italian beta reader \ sensitivity reader and you're open to that I'd gladly help uwu/
PS: we need more Luca in the final version uwu
Wow, thank you so much for taking the time for a review! I'm glad you liked it and loved both Morgan and Luca as much as I do! <3
Your critique about the Mafia aesthetics is valid, being from Italy, but the Mafia aesthetic was actually based on the Italian-American Mafia from around the 1920s but in a modern setting! <3 I chose to veer away from making it entirely realistic to not make it too dark and to give it some leeway in terms of story (similar to how Ozmafia had Mafia features but had definitely taken liberties in terms of realism!) ^^
Though, I definitely wouldn't reject any help beta reading when I have more of the script ready, so when the time comes I'd be happy to reach out and see if you're still interested! <3
(P.S. Luca will have his own route for sure, and I'm super excited to write more of the snuggly little guy~ ^^)
Nghh, I cant choose among them. This is great
Thank you so much! I'm glad they all ended up likeable enough <3
Omg im in love! If you need any proof readers, please let me know.
Thank you so much for saying so! I'm super happy you enjoyed the demo <3
I'm definitely always keeping an eye out for proofreaders to help the route writing process! I'll be taking a short break (about 1-2 weeks) to recover from the jam crunch time before I resume working on it, so when I get around that point in the script I'll make sure to reach out and see if you're still interested/have the time!
Dammit, Chim beat me to reviewing it! (lmaooo it's no problem love you!) Plus I played it first hahaha
I loved this story from the second I heard of it, to reading it, to now playing it! Danielle has great character, and yet feels good as a sit in for the player. Morgan is incredibly endearing, and I love my boys- Luca especially, he deserves the world!
The music is well placed, the UI is very sexy red, and the writing is top tier!
I buy into the emotion presented, and love how diverse your cast is! Even if I wasn't entirely wanting to make love to every guy, I definitely wanted to get to know them!
Antonio is sexy in a frustrating way, cause I want to punch him, but he and Danielle have so much tension!
Alessio is a pain in my ass, but it's mainly because I am #1 Luca lover.
Angelo is my babe, and I want to know him, I want to peel back all his layers I know you have for him.
Leo is my second fav for a reason, he's such a loveable dork and so sexy too- the perfect combo.
Ren really won me over making it to my 3rd spot for the guys, I love that scene with him and the Danielle in regards to the journal! Goes to show how one scene can make you feel meh towards someone to totally getting them and loving them!
Luca is best boy, no notes, how can you improve perfection?
The relationship Danielle has with her grandfather is top notched, and so nuanced and real! But no less loving.
The humor is well placed, and there is so much heart in this project. I am it's biggest fan and will follow it no matter where it may go <3 Being even a small part of this project makes me so incredibly happy!
Thank you so much for all your help with the beta testing and proofreading, Joy!! I'm glad that the demo met your expectations and you were able to meet and enjoy the characters in new ways compared to the script!
Excited to get the routes ready <3
Hey!!! I played the demo!!! It was so good already, gosh!
I have to say the beginning of it got me HOOKED! The emotions, the music, the writing, everything was just excellent and Danielle ended up being a very touching protagonist. But more than that, her interactions with the boys showed her doubts, her fears, her hopes, her personality and shaped her as a character. Honestly, the moment she suggests a truce with Antonio made me scream: more than Antonio, it's really Danielle who I've fallen in love with during this scene efgrfgtrf really, she's in my top 5 girl protagonists so far! You managed to make her relatable and, I insist, touching. Also, Morgan is a supportive friend and an angel, I really enjoyed her!!! Excited to see more of her in the full-game.
For the love interests, I have to agree with Joy: LUCA????? LUCA????? LUCA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I loved his friendship with Alessio (when he said "That's my boy!" I WHEEZED). He's nice, caring, gentle, friendly, seems to be small in such a big world, and I really LOVE this kind of characters!!!!! So many green flags!! I love him!!!!! I remember he was my number 1 in terms of personality (my overall number 1 was Leo though if I had to consider personality and looks), and I'm glad I was right: I LOVE HIM!!!!! And the cooking CG was adorable!!!!!! And when Danielle told him: "Then I won't be your charge, I'll be your friend" EFRGTR4ET AAAAAAH!!!!!! They are definitely my OTP from this game!!!!!
Also, I have to say I'm pleasantly surprised by Renzo!!! He was very supportive and I enjoyed that a lot!! I was expecting him to be a bit more like Alessio, but he was better than that actually!! Excited to explore his relationships with his brother and with Angelo. And the "duvet monster" thing was so cute efgbtrfghbg
Regarding my dear Leo, I loved him!!!! I'll admit I don't ship him as much with Danielle as I do for Luca, but the way he just comments things while being detached is so amusing (honestly, he was the funniest for me, the "he cheats at cards too" made me scream)? And he's still reassuring and present for Danielle, in his own way, of course, but aaaaaaah!!!! I do feel like he's the kindest of them all deep down (although Luca is a close second).
For Alessio, I enjoyed his interactions with Luca. He was a bit of a flirt, which is not my type, but you know, I want to discover him! To see what he's hiding deep down!
For Antonio, honestly, you got me at the book scene during the first part of the game lovers talking about books is one of favourite tropes fegdeze His relationship with Danielle was a rollercoaster, but Danielle is so amazing she's able to fix him!!!! I know she can!
I've seen too little of Angelo to have an opinion, but the conflict between his family's deeds and himself is interesting!! He seems like the ugly duckling of the group, and I'm curious to explore more!
Overall, the GUI was neat, the art was really good and the music carefully chosen (I especially enjoy the ones towards the end and at the beginning!). The writing was great and the pacing absolutely wonderful (I can tell you have experience in writing!). I'm really looking forward to discovering more, and you can be proud of you! This is an amazing first VN (is this your first VN?), and you did a splendid job!!!!
OMG Chim!! Thank you so much for leaving your thoughts! I'm beyond touched at all the nice things you said, but ESPECIALLY mentioning how much you liked Danielle and the music!
I wanted Danielle to be her own person in a sense, and not push her into a helpless self insert box while still letting her have her own problems she deals with in her own way, so I'm glad that panned out well! I also was SUPER nervous about the music and lamented over the choices and timing for a long time, so I'm glad you liked it!
As for the boys...I'm so glad you liked them! (Also super interesting to see how everyone is slowly converting to the Luca side!) I'm excited to see if your opinion changes as the routes get released!
(And yes this is my first VN!! Once again thank you so much for taking the time to leave this comment, I appreciate you!!)